The article Obama:"It is unacceptable that the United States ranks 15th in the world in broadband adoption" written by Sam Diaz explains that President Obama was very upset when hearing the new about the United States. Even though the Internet was invented here in the United Sates it is not being utilized like others are doing. Obama would like broadband to be available to students in school and in hospitals (276).
Sam Diaz does a good job with the beginning paragraphs and the use of the president's quotes. He does fall off of topic a little bit. He begins to talk about the United States announcing a recession and how many jobs were lost. That does not really flow with the topic. He could of found facts saying how people out of work effects the use of broadband. Then he continues with a quote from President Obama talking about new investments and how it will create millions of jobs. How will that have an impact of the advancement of broadband in the United States? Sam could have included details of how and what they are going to do to help move the United States up from the fifteenth ranking. He then ends the article talking about bridges and roads, that also does not go with the topic.
The article was very interesting at the beginning but as it started to float off the subject it was a little hard to understand where Sam was going with it. To improve this article I would suggest more fact about how the president is going to help improve the broadband use in the United States and tell what the other countries are doing. Why are we not in the top five, what are they doing differently?
Good work, Mesia. This is analysis!
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